浙江省英语高考读后续写 求给这篇文章润色或点评
不得不赞一下你的书法和英语水平！续写思路也挺好！
有几个小错误 :
1) stop过去式 stopped
2) 第三行，so, as a result,语意重复搜趣网，用一个就可以了。
3) I felt a powerful hand touched m搜趣网y hand. touched--touching
4) It's the guy (who took a seat next to mine) had a firm grasp on my hands.
这是一个强调句型，用的很好。不过括号内只是定语从句，had前应加一个关系词that.
有几个小错误 :
1) stop过去式 stopped
2) 第三行，so, as a result,语意重复搜趣网，用一个就可以了。
3) I felt a powerful hand touched m搜趣网y hand. touched--touching
4) It's the guy (who took a seat next to mine) had a firm grasp on my hands.
这是一个强调句型，用的很好。不过括号内只是定语从句，had前应加一个关系词that.
2010浙江高考英语作文例文
速度2010高考英语作文：浙江卷作文参考范文2010-08-10 14:19浙江卷
最近，李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”。请你根据她的事迹（在上周六下午，不顾天气的炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛服装），用英语为班级板报写一篇100搜趣网—120个词的短文。
你的文章应包括下列要点：
1. 李越的事迹及其对同学的影响；
2. 你的评论。
注意：1. 文章的标题和开头已给出（不计词数）。
3. 参考词汇：singing contest 歌咏www.souquanme.com比赛 costume 服装
Star Student of the Week
Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student oTnAaLzfNwf the Week ” for what she did for our class . ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
Star Student of the Week
Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student of the Week” for what she did for our class. On the hot afternoon of last Saturday , Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another, looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest . While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms , she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting . Finally , she found the right clothes . Deeply moved by her efforts , we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest .
Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class . Besides , she often devotes her spare time to helping others . She deserves the honor and we should learn from her .
最近，李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”。请你根据她的事迹（在上周六下午，不顾天气的炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛服装），用英语为班级板报写一篇100搜趣网—120个词的短文。
你的文章应包括下列要点：
1. 李越的事迹及其对同学的影响；
2. 你的评论。
注意：1. 文章的标题和开头已给出（不计词数）。
3. 参考词汇：singing contest 歌咏www.souquanme.com比赛 costume 服装
Star Student of the Week
Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student oTnAaLzfNwf the Week ” for what she did for our class . ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
Star Student of the Week
Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student of the Week” for what she did for our class. On the hot afternoon of last Saturday , Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another, looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest . While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms , she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting . Finally , she found the right clothes . Deeply moved by her efforts , we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest .
Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class . Besides , she often devotes her spare time to helping others . She deserves the honor and we should learn from her .
